40 passengers evacuated from Northwest Airlines jet Flight 428, following a flight from Minneapolis, due to a landing tower employee spotting smoke near the wheels.
Today at the LaCrosse, Wis., Municipal Airport, 40 passengers where evacuated from a Northwest Airlines jet. Flight 428 was evacuated because a landing tower employee spotted smoke near the wheels. All of this happened following a flight from MInneapolis.
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Three years missing 7-year-old boy is found in Brick Township, N.J after neighbor recognized the child's picture. The boy's mother is facing kidnapping and interference with warrant charges.
On Thursday night a 7-year-old boy, who has been missing for three years, was found in Brink Township, N.J. The boy was found due to a neighbor recognizing the child's picture when it was shown after the movie Adam The Song Continues called the police. The police arrested the boy's mother, Ellen Lynn Conner, 27; she is currently facing the chargers of kidnapping and interference with a custody warrant.
Hmm, why are you giving me two versions of each lead? One good version is enough.
ReplyDeleteIn both cases, don't start your lead with "when" it happened, start with "what" and/or "who." Ex.: A 7-year-old boy who had been missing for three years was found in Brink Township, N.J., Thursday night after a neighbor recognized the child's picture on TV and called the police.
Now why don't you try rewriting the other one.
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